Can someone tell me if this script is correct? I'm trying to write in full cursive with my own personal style and this is one of my first letterings. 

I'm quite happy and I think that it does look readable, but I'm afraid that the two long line I left in the middle of the first sentence could break its logic. The long line in the second one should divide this "有形" from this "以太".
I found many different way to write the same Hanzi in cursive and I'm afraid I made up a mess mixing styles that don't match among them... but I almost like the final result and I hope it can be considered a good work.  

According to you is this strange or wrong? 
Do the Hanzi have a logical and coherent style?
Can you easily understand what it means? 



I hope not to be off topic, if so I really apologize. I have no intention to waste anyone's time, I'd just like to have an opinion from people I can trust.
Hanzi have many different writing styles and there is no right or wrong as long as you can understand what you are writing.

For me, it looks like Caoshu style. But unfortunately that is one of the hard-to-read styles in Hanzi. I only recognize 4 out of 8 of them. (if I am counting right)

As for 太, it is not easy to recognize. The small dot should be more upwards, at least in between the two swipes. 

If this is for display purpose, that is fine. But not in communication purpose as not so many Chinese these days could read Caoshu.