How do we trade-off succinctness for accuracy in 每当我爸忙的时侯他就让我吃? I'm having trouble with one part of this answer from Tang Ho relating to the story Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang was fat when she was young:


  我爸忙时就让我吃， --> (每当)我爸忙(的)时(侯)(他)就让我吃，
  When my father was busy, he would let me eat ...


(On the left is my writing, and on the right is Tang Ho's suggestions/corrections.  The mental image I have is a father busy working on a computer, ignoring his daughter and distracting her with junk food.)

In my writing, I was trying to be succinct.  I certainly feel like adding 每当 is an improvement (it's a new word for me) and conveys the idea that it happens repeatedly.  But maybe the other additions are unnecessary (?); I've seen these things omitted in writing previously.

Question: How do we trade-off succinctness for accuracy in 每当我爸忙的时侯他就让我吃?
我爸忙时(他)就让我吃 is a correct translation for When my father was busy, he would let me eat ....

But I guess your intended meaning is probably: When my father was busy, he would not forbid me from eating ..., 我爸忙时(他)就不管我吃东西