Is this clear? 我们等了一段时间，其间我们没观察到任何直接和明显的副作用, ... (waiting around for side-effects) From my writing in Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang gets an injection from the &quot;doctor&quot;, this part seems particularly problematic:


  Original version: 没有发现了立即而明显的后果，...


I intended for (but clearly fell short of) something along the lines of:


  [We] did not observe immediate and obvious side-effects, ...


By side effects, I'm thinking like feinting, pain, loss of movement, etc.  Toosky Hierot explained how 后果 is inappropriate, and user3528438 mentioned being unsure about 发现 here.

So let's try again:


  Modified version: 我们等了一段时间，其间我们没观察到任何直接和明显的副作用, ...


I've added a bit more to clarify that we're sitting around for a little bit and simply watching what happens.  For something to be observable, it needs to be both "immediate" (e.g., it doesn't happen 1 hour later) and "obvious" (e.g., it's not "we've just destroyed your liver").

Question: Is this clear?

(Also, I want to say thank you very much for all this help!)
&quot;直接&quot; in &quot;其间我们没观察到任何(直接和)明显的副作用&quot; should be removed, because there's no such thing as 'indirect side effect'

If you meant &quot;immediate&quot;, the correct word is &quot;即時&quot; --&gt; &quot;其间我们没观察到任何(即時和)明显的副作用&quot;

&quot;我们等了一段时间，其间我们没观察到任何明显的副作用&quot;


You can use 並 (actually) to strengthen the connection between the two phrase


&quot;我们等了一段时间，其间我们並没观察到任何明显的副作用&quot;


Change 没观察到  to 沒有观察到

没 mainly used for &quot;without + object&quot;
沒有 is more suitable for &quot;have no + object&quot;

&quot;我们等了一段时间，其间我们並沒有观察到任何明显的副作用&quot;
&quot;我们等了一段时间，其间我们並沒有观察到任何即時和明显的副作用&quot;


You only need to state the subject &quot;我们&quot; once here


&quot;我们等了一段时间，其间並沒有观察到任何明显的副作用&quot;
&quot;我们等了一段时间，其间並沒有观察到任何即時和明显的副作用&quot;

Edit:
Other user rewrote the sentence in a more native way in his answer. That reduced the length of the original text greatly. In that case, I would just write &quot;等了一會，見沒有異狀，医生就走了&quot; (After waited for a while, seeing that there are no abnormalities, the doctor left.)
I don't know which the OP prefers, but I think it would be more beneficial for her, if I don't stray too far away from the original sentence that she came up with with her current writing ability